I have decided to put myself out there for once, so I'm participating in the 100 Word Challenge. Wish me luck! Here is my first entry:
I could almost see her brain working. It was like an old car. You could put the key in the ignition, turn it, feel the car shake with old age and over exertion, hear the pistons groan as they try to pump life into the decrepit car, but the pistons have been rusted into their stationary positions. Her forehead creased in frustration and confusion. She was trying to answer a simple question: Do you remember me today? I’ve known her for twenty years, but every time I come to visit my great grandmother she meets me for the first time.
Welcome to the challenge! Great first post, and very emotional.
ReplyDeleteA heart rending picture of a sadness we all come into contact with, one way or another. Well done. And welcome to the 100 Word Challenge. YOU are a worthy contributor.
ReplyDeleteThank you! It means a lot to hear that.
ReplyDeleteVery nicely done. Welcome to the challenge.
ReplyDeleteI love that last line.
ReplyDeleteI agree, the last line is definitely my favorite. Very descriptive of what having a family member with Alzheimer's is really like.
ReplyDeleteBeautifully crafted. The analogy of an old car was wonderful.
ReplyDeleteWelcome to the Challenge.
What an unusual but appropriate analogy. Well done!
ReplyDeleteWhile sad - alzheimers does allow someone to always meet new people. :)
ReplyDeletegreat job and welcome to the challenge.
I really liked this. I love the comparison of an old car with someone trying to get their brain to function.
ReplyDeleteWell done and welcome to the challenge
My father had dementia for years. This is a very engaging post. I wish I could type more actually, but ....
ReplyDeletethe last line is perfect. makes the otehrs lines work too.
ReplyDeletewell written
Welcome to the challenge! I haven't had to deal with Alzheimer's personally, but it seems to be very painful for the family and loved ones. Thank you for sharing this piece.
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